Tuesday, July 20, 2010

1. Introduction

So... I'm not too original. I'm copying you, Neffy. In a sense, at least.
I have a list of 100 themes. Meet theme 1, Introduction.

P.S. This is a great idea! What a fun, difficult way to train yourself. Hence why I stole it. Don't be too angry?

It’s simple to say hello
To one you newly meet.
But what do you truly gather
From such an easy word?

We cover ourselves in this
Eternally devolving rhetoric...
A single word substituting a hundred
New and fresh thoughts.
Why is it so impossible to share
Oneself with others?

Speak to me in terms I can
Comprehend—feel, touch, taste!
Talk of dappled-light,
Crisp grass... Anything but
The trite terms we frequent
In these days of apathy and
Social retardation.

Tell me things—sweet things,
Sad things, things better left
Buried beneath social norms.
Let me in on anything,
Anything at all!
Tell me your fears, tell me your joys!
For these, my friend,
Introduce a new you to me—
A real you, left covered by
The tradition of man.

—C.R.E.

4 comments:

  1. I'm a bit afraid of doing the 100 challenge... so, I'm doing the 31 one instead.
    that and I'm not that fond of even numbers.
    but I think artist, in some way, should do a challenge similar to this. it's really good for you. you can grow so much.
    ps. I like it (is there anything else to say...? I have to crit. sorry).

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  2. I totally agree with you. =D
    Oh, and please feel free to criticize. It's the entire reason I post here... I want to grow.

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  3. I really like the idea and the thought in this piece - it's very well-thought out. But an english teacher once told me that every single word in a poem is of great importance, and there are some words here that just don't ... feel(?) right... I love the sensory details, especially stanza 3 (that's my favorite), but the other ones just don't quite compare... But, that's my opinion. Do what you will with it :D

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  4. I actually completely agree, thanks! The third was the only stanza that really stood out... But, as I liked the message, I posted it. Still rough, for sure. Thanks, Kaylee!

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