3. Making History
All of creation seems to intake sharply
At the thought of your newest discovery.
What ends will you accomplish?
What goods will you perform? Or is
Evil your dark intent? Only one thing
Is for sure—Life will never be the same.
After you have your way with it,
Will you nonchalantly toss it aside
Or cling to it lovingly as a Savior and King?
Pregnant with hope, admiration, and fear,
I will follow you regardless.
As a simple man, making my mark
Is my only moral compass—
Though a sad and meager existence,
It is, that I live day in and out.
—C.R.E.
Honestly, I was trying to think of something to criticize in this poem, and it took me a while to figure it out... You really are an excellent writer. I had to read it a few times to actually get the meaning, but that's not a bad thing. It's just vague, but I'm guessing that's what you were going for. The first stanza is better than the second in my opinion, and I am still trying to figure out how the two stanzas actually fit together... But I quite like the last 2 lines. It's a very realistic outlook on life.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kaylee. =) It's nice to have someone around to take the time to look at this stuff and form an opinion.
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